Thursday, May 14, 2015

A Work in Progress

Hey guys! Sadly, I haven't had the chance to post on my poor neglected blog over this past week. As a peace offering, I present to you:  chapter two of White Wings!

Read here.


God bless,
-Amy Rochelle

8 comments:

  1. Wow. Amy. This is amazing. I can't wait to actualy read the whole book. You are awsome!

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    1. Thank you so much!!! There's more coming soon!

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    2. Oh thank goodness. I can hardly wait. I'm an auther myself ( albeit a rather bad one) and I like reading other peoples work to see how it's done. Do you have any suggestions or writing tips? I need all the help I can get. Thanks!

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  2. I like it, though it does seem a bit abrupt and kinda cliche. No offense. Clishes can still make excellent stories if they are done well, and this story is quite unique. I like it a lot.

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    1. Yeah, this chapter isn't my favorite and I can't seem to get rid of the cliche feeling. Maybe there's a way I can hint at the necessary information without using a prophecy....

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    2. Or maybe I'll delay the information a little bit. That might work better

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    3. I think information can be delayed. That is what I would do myself. Another thing you could possibly do is leave it unclear as to which family the Chosen One comes from, or which particular branch of the family it...I don't know, I will think on this. I'm usually pretty good at turning cliches on their heads. If you like I could help you brainstorm.

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    4. Thank you for your help! Brainstorming always helps. It is important for Rae to believe that the Lightbearer comes from her family, however. So i'll need to leave that in somewhere. Just maybe not at the beginning of the chapter.

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